Revise your chosen piece by adding "In Your Head Thinking". 
Remember what I did to my Urgent Care piece?
Example:    My finger exploded once he gave me the shot. It felt so weird.
Revised sentence: Once the first shot was done, my finger felt like it was going to explode.  I don't know how I am going to get through this, I thought.  The feeling was creepy and was making sweat and shake.
Editing Paragraph Week 7 Thursday